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Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. Do you agree or disagree?

#stores #food #products
Food
items
 are the prime concern for people while visiting grocery stores. I strongly agree with the notion that shops should sell local eatables concerning its positive impacts on
economy
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the economy
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 and
secondly
 other attributes associated with
food
 products
such
 as price and lesser shelf
life
 as compared to imported products which are indispensable while purchasing
such
items
 followed by a reasoned conclusion. To start with,
food
 is the basic necessity of
life
 and people spend almost 30% of their income on
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
food
. According to empirical research by
Revenue
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the Revenue
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 Board of Pakistan revealed that if local
food
 consumption increases, the revenue generated from the sale can be ploughed back
in
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economy
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the economy
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.
As a result
,
economy
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the economy
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 will flourish and other sectors and infrastructure will improve
with
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in
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 tandem.
Thus
, stores should only sell and promote local
food
 commodities and local manufacturers so income generated will rotate within the nation which would foster economic growth. Another insight that must not be neglected, the characteristics of
food
items
 specifically shelf
life
, transportation guidelines, and expiry date.
For instance
, recent news broadcast on Pakistan news channels,
a
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sad demise of 2 children due to consumption of imported
food
 from a restaurant. Initial investigation report confirmed that though,
product
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the product
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 was not expired but somehow mishandled during transit (might be
exposure
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 to
sun
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) causes the growth of bacteria which lead to
expiry
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the expiry
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 of young ones. Consistent with
this
 line of thinking, it is agreed that shops must offer local products because there are
less
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 chances of perishing, have greater expiry dates and can transport with
an
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ease as per instructions. To conclude, shops must sell local
food
items
 because it not only promotes
economy
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the economy
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 but
are
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also
 effective in terms of shelf
life
 and transportation. Any negligence in
food
 purchase can lead to fatal consequences.
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