At the present time, the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, it has been noticed that
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number
of
youngsters
are high compared with old aged
people
. I believe that the advantages of
this
trend outweigh its drawbacks.
This
essay will discuss both positives and negatives of both
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sides. Having more
number
of young children
in country
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can help for country’s development.
Firstly
, children always come up with new innovation by observing
outer
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environment, due to which it helps in creative outcomes.
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, Facebook was introduced by a 20-year-old boy. He came up with the idea of connecting
people
through the internet and bringing the world virtually closer.
Secondly
, when there
are
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more
number
of
people
available to perform a particular job, labour becomes cheaper;
as a
result
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more foreign multinationals try to expand in
market
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where labour cost is low.
Thus
, young adults can bring immense benefits
On the other hand
, having more
youngsters
can be detrimental.
This
is due to the fact that a large
number
of
youngsters
can
result
in
less
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fewer

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job opportunity;
as a
result
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it can create unemployment in the economy which can lead to
increase
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in the crime rate.
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, if a person does not get a job for a long time, he can think
illicit
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ways to earn money. Another disadvantage could be that there will be less experienced staff in the company;
as a
result
, the decisions can be ineffective due to lack of experience.
Therefore
, too many young
people
can be harmful. To conclude, in some
countries
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there are more young
people
in comparison with the old age group. it can be established from the above paragraphs that there are many advantages because of the developments young adults bring to
the
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society
in contrast
to disadvantages . After thorough analysis on
this
subject, it is predicted that the positive effects of the debate over more
youngsters
in a country will always be greater than the adverse effects.

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