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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Residing in a foreign country where you have to speak a
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that is
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 distinct from your mother tongue has several drawbacks. some
people
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 argue that
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 situation has social and practical difficulties. I strongly agree I strongly agree with
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 view because of the incapacities of finding new friend circles and a glass ceiling. First of all, immigrant
people
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 who live in a different place from their hometown have to confront challenges like making new friends.Many local individuals prefer to be friends with their fellow citizens rather than foreigners because it takes more endeavour to socialize with a
person
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 who a different
language
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.
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, experiences show that some French
people
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 do not like to speak with a
person
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 who is not French. Eventually,
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 country is the
last
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 immigration destination for
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 because of their non-friendly behaviour.
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, there is a glass ceiling in countries for non-native
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 specifically in career occasions. If a
person
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 cannot communicate cohesively, it is more likely to be ignored at work.
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, there will not be any promotion for them to upgrade in job positions.
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, there is an experiment that shows there is no evidence of a Persian employee who could promoted to an upper level of management like being a CEO in Germany. It seems that variance in the Persian
language
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 and German can lead to misunderstanding and ignoring. Ultimately, German stakeholders prefer to promote a native staff
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 of a Persian one.
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, some may argue that speaking a new
language
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 not only has social problems but
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 has practical problems like not knowing idioms and expressions and having distinguish accents which can be solved by persisting and exercising. In conclusion, despite practical challenges, I believe that there are some social problems
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 as a glass ceiling and disability of making new friends as well that make the life of a strange
person
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 more challenging.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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