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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

#experts #children #language #school #outweigh
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As some people
believes
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 that the
childern
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children
 should begin to learn a foreign
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 at primary
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 rather than
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secondary
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, it is
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beneficial
 for
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children to learn
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foreign
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language
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 in secondary
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 because they already have a burden of learning
another subjects
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another subject
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 and if we add one more
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 it will make the study more stressful and it may
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effect
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affect
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 children mental and physical health because when they start there primary
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 they always want a time to play and relax and in that case if they get one more subject to learn
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 it will create
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 of
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knowledge
 for them. Along with that, it would be a
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strong
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stong
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 hurdle for
childern
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children
 to learn their own mother
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tongue
 because primary
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 make the base of the kid . Kids learn how to behave, enjoy and the subject which they get to more in their
secondry
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secondary
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. In secondary
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school
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 they can sharpen their knowledge and skills and
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 they have the more zeal to learn new things.
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, Primary
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 is the time when they start educating themself and sometimes it becomes really hard for them to learn. If we make them
to
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learn a
forein
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foreign
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 it would be more forced
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then
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than
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arbitary
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arbitrary
 and they would not the basic idea of a
language
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. By that, they will never want to learn the
language
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 in future.
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,
Childerns
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Children
 grasping power is more in Primary
school
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 and they
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can
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cam
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can
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 easily learn some new. In today's world when
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life
life's
lifes
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lives
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becoimg
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becoming
 more complicated and people are becoming more
competative
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competitive
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 it is
benefical
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beneficial
 to be
a
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bilingual or trilingual it will
definetly
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definitely
 help to grow an individual. At
last
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, I would say it is good for a person to choose on its own what they want to learn and
their
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 should be a keen interest of
a
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students
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.
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, Schools can put
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the
 foreign
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 in
a
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 optional subject and those interested can choose it and learn.
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