Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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that the
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should begin to learn a foreign
language
at primary
school
rather than
a
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secondary
school
.
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, it is
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for
the
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children to learn
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foreign

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foriegn
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language
in secondary
school
because they already have a burden of learning
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and if we add one more
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then
it will make the study more stressful and it may
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effect
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children mental and physical health because when they start there primary
school
they always want a time to play and relax and in that case if they get one more subject to learn
then
it will create
overlap
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of
knowledgw
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knowledge

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for them. Along with that, it would be a
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stong
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hurdle for
childern
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children

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to learn their own mother
tonuge
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tongue

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because primary
school
make the base of the kid . Kids learn how to behave, enjoy and the subject which they get to more in their
secondry
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secondary

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school
. In secondary
school
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,school

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they can sharpen their knowledge and skills and
then
they have the more zeal to learn new things.
Moreover
, Primary
school
is the time when they start educating themself and sometimes it becomes really hard for them to learn. If we make them
to
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learn a
forein
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language
then
it would be more forced
then
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arbitary
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and they would not the basic idea of a
language
. By that, they will never want to learn the
language
in future.
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,
Childerns
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grasping power is more in Primary
school
and they
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cam
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easily learn some new. In today's world when
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life
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lifes
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becoming

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more complicated and people are becoming more
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competitive

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then
it is
benefical
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beneficial

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to be
a
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bilingual or trilingual it will
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help to grow an individual. At
last
, I would say it is good for a person to choose on its own what they want to learn and
their
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should be a keen interest of
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students
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.
On the other hand
, Schools can put
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foreign
language
in
a
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optional subject and those interested can choose it and learn.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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