The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children. Do you think this is the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, obesity has become

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a major problem for

children

and some people may reckon that if we consider substantial amounts of time to

exercise

, it can be a viable solution.

However

, being plump can lead

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health

problems

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young people;

therefore

, we must search for the best solutions. In the modern era, unfortunately, there are numerous overweight

children

all over the world who suffer from obesity and

this

issue exposes them to several

health

problems

such

as high blood pressure, heart failure, diabetes and etcetera. According to the statistics,

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lifestyle has caused a sharp rise in the number of obese people especially

children

and young individuals on account of wrong habits like consuming fast food in

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large quantities

instead

of cooking at home. What is the suitable approach to dealing with

this

problem? In my opinion, we can purpose two fundamental approaches to manage

this

problem: the

first

is revising diet and the

second

one is doing

exercise

.

Health

experts should provide an appropriate schedule to schools and parents;

thus

, we can keep the weight of our

children

under control and consider suitable measures for their

health

. I believe that

exercise

will not be effective but with an appropriate diet; meanwhile, remember that these are

health

experts that determine how much time you should

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on sport. In conclusion,

besides

exercise

, we should suggest a suitable diet

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children

and their parents; needless to say, spending more time on

exercise

doesn’t mean

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result. Eventually, I can predict these approaches will reduce the risk of some obesity-relied disease

such

as diabetes;

in addition

, the number of obese

children

will decrease.