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Today there are a lot of websites providing news on the internet. Some people believe that these websites will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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With the rise in technology, computers have started to give competition to traditional of providing news ways like
newspapers
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 and
magazines
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. I strongly believe that computers will never replace traditional
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 and
magazines
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.
While
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 the number of
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 who use computers and access the
internet
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 increases every day, I find it hard to believe that
websites
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 will totally replace traditional
newspapers
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 and
magazines
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. From my experience, I have seen
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 like my grandmother struggle with the latest technology and
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,
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 to the old and traditional ways. To be more specific,
people
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 who are technically challenged find it hard to use the
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 and stick to what's more convenient to them.
Furthermore
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,
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 on the
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 can be taken down and easily hacked
while
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newspapers
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 once printed, cannot be changed and have become a part of history which cannot be tampered with.
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,
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 require the
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 to work, which may not be accessible in rural areas
whereas
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, a newspaper can be easily accessible.
In addition
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 to the points above, advertisements on the
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 are unskippable which can be a nuisance to some
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whereas
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 the advertisements in
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 and
magazines
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 can be easily skipped. Long exposure to
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websites
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 which use the
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 and a screen can cause nausea and can harm the vision of the
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 over time, if not used carefully.
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,
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 can be counter-productive as they can cause a lot of distractions.
To conclude
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, I don't think
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 will fully accept
websites
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 providing news on the
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 and will stick to the traditional ways like
newspapers
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 and
magazines
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.
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility: the quality of being easy to obtain or use.
  • Digitalization: the process of converting information into a digital format.
  • Subscription model: a business model where customers pay regularly to access a product or service.
  • Immediacy: the quality of bringing one into direct and instant involvement with something.
  • Eco-conscious: caring and concerned about the environment.
  • Credibility: the quality of being trusted and believed in.
  • Misleading information: information that gives the wrong idea or impression.
  • Tactile: related to the sense of touch.
  • Nostalgia: a sentimental longing for the past.
  • Screen glare: the bright and distracting reflection on a screen from a light source.
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