Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Few
people
think that advertisement has gained their attention to purchase
products
however
others ponder that advertising has become so prevalent that
they
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no more interested in
advertisements
.
This
essay talks about both views along with reasons and relevant examples.
Advertisements
depends
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on factors like age, gender, necessity, celebrity,
products
etc. For
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example
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Children below 10years think whatever  showed in
advertisement
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the advertisement
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are genuine as in terms of foods like chocolates, Maggie etc and tend to purchase them by forcing their parents.
Also
, young girls and boys tend to buy cosmetics like Fair & Lovely as they assume that their skin colour gets change though they are dark. Adults after seeing ads of santoor,
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are persuaded to buy
such
kind of
products
for looking young. 
On the other hand
,
people
who belong to traditional families, or who believe in conventional things pay no interest in
advertisements
. They believe that
advertisements
are just a business for earning income. If they want to purchase any product
instead
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on
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relying on
advertisements
they directly visit the store. For an instance, one of my friends placed an order for
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a back
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back pack
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with certain
specificiations
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specifications
and colour.
However
she had received
product
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a product
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with different specifications,
also
the quality of
bag
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was not good. Though they have replaced with
other bag
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another bag
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she was not happy with
quality
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. Again she has to visit
offline
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the offline
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store for purchasing
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quality bag.
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of her time was wasted in refunding money since
then
she decided not to depend on
advertisements
. In my view, if the product is good
then
there is no need to advertise as
people
who have purchased will act as carriers of
brand
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the brand
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. Let me share my own experience the college in which I did my higher education has got no advertisement
however
every year many students fail to get admission
in
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it. So, I would conclude by saying one
shouldnot
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should not
shouldn't
completely rely on
advertisements
. It is always advisable to take feedback from
people
who have purchased the
products
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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