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Crime rate has increase with the advancement of technology. Do you agree or disagree. Give your opinion.

#crime #rate #advancement #technology
With the latest technologies that are being developed and
innovated
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 there are discussions that
crime
rates
 are increasing.
This
 essay will discuss that it is completely untrue due to the benefits that technologies provide to
the
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society. Technology has become part of our daily lives and it is still proving
purpose
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that is
 essential to everyone. When it comes to
crime
rates
 it is becoming extremely useful for police officers and anybody who have the means to use them.
For instance
, CCTV’s are ubiquitous from
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 to every corner of the streets and buildings or even at the comfort of your home it can be seen.
This
 technology helped the
crime
rates
 to decline because
of
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the sole reason which is, people are scared to be caught on cam.
In addition
 to that, it helped
police men
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 and investigators to immediately solve crimes without wasting time
unlike
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 the old days that takes 6 months to years before it will be concluded. Another technology that has proven more effective in decreasing crimes are the microchips which are installed at the body of a human being. In Germany,
this
 experiment was tested at the most dangerous suburb area in their region.
Crime
rates
 went down to 0% in the smallest amount of time for 2 months.
This
 test has proven that with the help of
this
 innovation it can save lives to up 90% once
this
have
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 become widely available all over the globe.
Moreover
, people will be more aware that their actions
are being track
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 by the government or police which leads them in becoming more mindful of their actions before they do so. In conclusion, I believe that having
advance
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 technologies present
to
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 our lives can in fact do more good to people when it comes to their safety rather than not having them. It curbed more crimes than ever before which made certain countries
crime
 rate free.
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