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Many of the countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects. Why do they think so? What can be done to change their views?

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Some countries are in believe that global tourism is causing detrimental effects. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons as to why
this
 had been their point of view and suggest solutions to shift their perspectives. One of the reasons why countries have been linking a negative effect towards foreign people upon visiting is being disrespectful to
locals
. Many
locals
 find that tourists do not have enough knowledge on how to properly greet people from their respective countries.
For instance
, in Japan, when a tourist walks by and waves at them, they find it rude for strangers, specifically from foreign people to have
this
 kind of greeting. It is important that visitors should be aware of how to treat them correctly.
In addition
, pollution and air traffic are the key effects on international visitors. These damaging consequences are
also
 increasing every year which in fact, resulted in a low-grade quality of living for inhabitants. There have been studies that proved 80% of travellers in
this
 present world are continuing to grow, with
this
 reality, we can expect more contamination and viruses that can be mutated from one person to another.
However
, proper awareness and imposing law, can generate a positive perspective for
locals
 and help them alter their views. In
this
 case, upon arrival, travellers should be mandated to be screened and briefed to have a better understanding of a certain country they are visiting. By
this
 action, visitors can give a harmonious, safe and peaceful visit to their country of choice while at the same time regarding the
locals
 in a respectful manner. In conclusion,
although
 there are some detrimental effects on tourism, I believe every mind can be altered provided with proper measures and law for them to follow.
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