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The Internet has caused people to be isolated from their real lives. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era, the enhancement of technology affecting every individual's lifestyle and
people
 like to spend more
time
 on the
internet
 rather than natural life which causes depression or other mental diseases among human beings. I strongly agreed with that statement ,
people
 going far away from their actual lives by using of
internet
.
Firstly
, due to ,stress everybody wants peace in his life and
people
 do not like to spend
time
 with their family members
although
 they have
time
 to spend on social media like Facebook, Twitter or Instagram and using social-networking sites bring more conflicts among every relationship.
Moreover
, parents
also
 like to spend their leisure
time
 on mass media and failed to give
time
 to their children in
this
 fast-paced environment which cause a weak relationship between them.
Secondly
, Individuals giving preference to their phones or laptops rather than their family members and they love to play video games on the
internet
 which cause bad health or mental issues.
For instance
, there is no physical work for
people
 when they play games on the computer and they do not get chance to go in natural life like outside views of sunrise or sunset and they do not feel fresh air which causes weak eyesight or muscle pain.
Furthermore
,
people
 urge to do social chat or making friends on social sites which create distance between their actual friends or classmates. In the nutshell, in today's world,
people
 spend maximum
time
 on the
internet
 for their work purpose or for entertainment purpose but they do not like to go in a society or in their families which bring their lifestyle more fast and stressful.
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