IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 1.5

Some people say that Government should break down all the historic buildings and replace them with modern buildings. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #buildings
Every country has been belong to some historic value and culture. Historic building told every part of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
history. The Government plays an important role to maintain and defend the ancient part of their society. While some people
feels
Change the verb form
feel
show examples
 that these buildings should
be break
Change the verb form
be broken
show examples
 down by the Government to make
a new modern structures
Correct the article-noun agreement
new modern structures
a new modern structure
show examples
. I oppose
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the provided statement. To commence with, the Government should protect all the monuments and buildings that related to historic events. It is the part of the local people. These places and buildings are told them where they came from, how
there
Replace the word
their
show examples
anchestor
Correct your spelling
ancestor
ancestors
 lived in a society.
Submitted by rayatsahil7 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable assets
  • tangible connection
  • architectural heritage
  • modernization
  • energy efficiency
  • adaptive reuse
  • historical significance
  • economic implications
  • sustainable
  • green technologies
What to do next:
Look at other essays: