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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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In the past few years, the tourism industry has become more prominent due to the increasing number of people travelling each year.
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 there are many exceptionally beautiful places with better condition, many adventurous travellers opt to visit a region where
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 are a bit unstable and inhabitable like the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. The boon of travelling to areas with unusual
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 like the Sahara desert is that one will be able to see the other part of the world and experience
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 in tranquillity.
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 the desert is indeed extremely hot, it is,
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, offers a different perspective in
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 because of the serene place with breathtakingly wonderful oases. Individuals who often dare to
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 to
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 a place can have time to contemplate
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 since it provides an environment
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 calming. Another thing to consider is the knowledge that they acquire in
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travel
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. An example of
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 is the trip to Antarctica in where there are many activities to be done like watching flightless birds, penguins and even whales.
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, visitors have the chance to listen to some educational stories about climate change and the effects on marine
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 in Antarctica. It is,
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, gives visitors an idea of what is happening in Antarctica. On the flip side, being enthralled of adventures in
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 difficult
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 could impose a health threat. Some unfavourable health disturbances like heat stroke, dehydration and fatigue can probably happen in the middle of one's journey. To exemplify, travellers who have underlying
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 but still dared to try
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 a tough adventure can incapacitate them to continue their
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.
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,
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 could make their effort go down the drain.
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, one greatest drawback of
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 an attempt to
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 to regions with uncertain
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 is that it could lead to unexpected demise. Despite the government fair warning, an American who was in his early 20's was boldly sailed to a deserted Indian Island and he was shot to death with bows and arrows by an isolated tribe. In conclusion, venturing in
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 places with supreme
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 can make someone ecstatic and feel indifferent. It is,
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, detrimental to others and could possibly lead to failure to survive.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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