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Some people think that the government should be responsible for crime prevention, while other believes that it is the responsibility of individuals to protect themselves. Discuss both side and give your opinion:

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Some
people
 reckon that individuals are responsible for protecting themselves;
on the other hand
, some others believe that the
government
 should do preventive measures to avoid committing a crime. But, which one has more importance? The role of
government
 or self-protection? In the modern era, every country has
own
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 laws and its citizens must respect them and obviously the
government
 has a duty to protect law-abiding citizens.
Moreover
, before considering punishment for offenders, the
government
 must provide
people
 with
a
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suitable education and preventive measures;
otherwise
, the community will become
to
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a forest where the strength talks with no rules and
this
 advanced world that we have will be destroyed in
couple
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 of months.
Therefore
, the
government
 has a major role to fight against criminals and I reckon that it is a must for any human society that has a system for keeping lawbreakers under control.
In contrast
, there are some
people
 who think self-protection is the priority of a community for standing against crimes. In my view,
people
 must respect laws and do
which
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preventive measures that the
government
 has recommended; but, the
government
 has to protect them and make society safe. Needless to say, certainly it's better for
people
 to be able to protect themselves but it is not a necessity for them. In conclusion, about dealing with offenders the
government
 has a major role;
however
,
people
 must respect laws and do their duties as a citizen. Eventually, in my opinion, the
government
 must provide safety to
people
 and should fight
versus
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 crimes.
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