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Some people think that governments should give financial support to artists, musicians and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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is
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 different views about the effectiveness of financial protection of
art
 workers by
governments
 to opposed seeming it a waste of
money
. In my idea ,
this
 kind of help for
artists
 is not important . In the following essay , both of the views will be discussed . The power full reason for
this
 belief that
financial
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 helps for actors is not necessary would be the fact that there are many issues in countries which solving them is essential rather than protection of
art
 workers .
Fore
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 instance , people in many societies suffer from
airpollution
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air pollution
 or poverty and apparently , spending
money
 on decreasing these matters will be more vital than spending
money
 on composers , musicians and
artists
 . So , if
governments
 are supportive to reduce public issues
instead
 of financial support to
artists
 , it will be higher beneficial in societies . Preserving cultural
inheritance
 would be the reason for having a positive view about
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financial protection of poets or
well known
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 people who do activities in the
art works
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artworks
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 .
More over
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 , cultural
inheritance
 has been inhabited by our past generation which plays a key role in
identity
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 of societies .
Further more
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 ,
art works
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artworks
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 are involved
of
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this
inheritance
 .
Fore
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 example , traditional
musics
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music
kinds of music
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, movies , composed indicate a country's culture . There fore , If
governments
 do investments
for
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artists
 , our historical
inheritance
 will be kept . In conclusion ,in my opinion , despite the fact that if
governments
 fund to
art
 players or poet, it will be profitable to
keeping
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 our culture , it would be a waste of
mony
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money
 because of observing some
dreadfull
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dreadful
 issues in countries that investment for them would be more reasonable and even if
governments
 protected to decreased vital problems in public
instead
 of spending
money
 on actors , people satisfaction would be increased .
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