Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could better spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree with this view?

Some individuals reckon that the government shouldn’t have budgets for the

arts

and that

money

can

spent

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on everything else. In my view, the

arts

play a major role in

culture

, economy, entertainment and etcetera in

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society;

thus

, let me disagree with those

people

who believe spending

money

on the

arts

means wasting

money

. In my opinion, the

arts

is

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a huge part of

culture

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in any community and if we don’t pay enough attention to the place of the

arts

in particular

traditional

arts

in society,

culture

will be harmed irreparably downing the road.

Additionally

, the

arts

also

provide

people

with several entertaining activities and has a major impact on

people

's well-being and

this

issue make the

arts

worth

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attention

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.

Moreover

, in the modern era, the

arts

has become one of the important parts of

economy

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especially in some advanced countries

such

as The United-states.

For instance

, nowadays, cinema has become an industry in many countries,

for

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Bollywood in India, and directly affect the economy;

for instance

, for making a movie many

people

will be involved and they will earn

money

in

this

way.

On the other hand

, there are some

people

who think the government should not have a particular budget for the

arts

.

This

issue has many harmful aspects;

for example

, there are many

people

who have

art-reliance

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vocation and they will be faced failure if the government doesn’t support the

arts

and artists. To summarize, remember that the

arts

has

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a profound effect on

people

's daily life;

furthermore

, there is a stiff correlation between the

arts

and

culture

and they are not separated so financial support is a necessity for the

arts

.