Some schools agree that fast-food restaurants and supermarkets can promote their products in school and that schools benefit from it. Is it a positive or negative development?

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THERE ARE SOME EDUCATIONAL INSTITUTIONS THAT ALLOW CERTAIN QUICK SERVICE RESTAURANTS AND GROCERY STORES TO SELL THEIR PRODUCTS INSIDE THE PREMISES IN EXCHANGE FOR SOME BENEFITS. WHILE THERE ARE FEW ADVANTAGES BEHIND

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TREND, IN MY OPINION, IT IS AN OVERALL, NEGATIVE ONE. ON THE ONE HAND, IT IS UNDENIABLE THAT A

SCHOOL

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GETS TO EARN BENEFITS FROM ALLOWING PRODUCT PROMOTIONS COMING FROM DIFFERENT BUSINESS INDUSTRY. MONEY, IN THE FORM OF EITHER DONATIONS OR SPONSORSHIPS, FROM ,ENTREPRENEURS CAN BE ADDED TO THE FUNDING FOR

SCHOOL

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DEVELOPMENT.

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, JOLLIBEE, A FAMOUS FILIPINO FAST FOOD RESTAURANTS WHO MOSTLY SELL THEIR PRODUCTS IN

SCHOOL

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CANTEENS IN MOST SCHOOLS IN THE PHILLIPINES, OFTEN DONATES FOR

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PLANT'S IMPROVEMENTS

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AS BUILDING OF ADDITIONAL CLASSROOMS OR PROVIDING UNITS OF COMPUTER FOR LEARNING.

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, LEARNERS AND FACULTY ARE BOTH BENEFITTED IN THE LONG RUN.

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, FAMILY MEMBERS OF STUDENTS AND PERSONNELS FROM LEARNING FACILITIES WHERE A BUSINESS OPERATES OFTEN ENJOY

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DISCOUNTS OR FREEBIES THROUGH FREE MEMBERSHIP. IN RETURN,

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AIDS IN THE FINANCIAL SAVINGS TO THEIR PRIME CUSTOMERS.

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, THESE ADVANTAGES SEEMED EXIGUOUS WHEN ITS BENEFITS ARE WEIGH TOGETHER.

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, ANY COMMERCIAL GOODS ARE COMMONLY RATED AS UNHEALTHY. IN THE CASE OF FAST FOOD RESTAURANTS,

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, WHICH EVERYBODY KNOWS, SELL UNHEALTHY SUSTENANCE WHICH WOULD HAVE A FAR-REACHING DELETERIOUS IMPACT ON ITS CUSTOMER'S WELLNESS.

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, IT IS COMMON TO SEE CORPULENT STUDENTS ON

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CAMPUSES WHO SUPPORT BALANCE-NUTRIENT-DEPRIVED FOODS OR REFRESHMENTS. WHAT IS MORE, NOT EVERY PENNY GIVEN FOR

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KIND OF PRODUCT PROMOTION GOES TO

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UPGRADATION PROJECTS. SOME, UNFORTUNATELY, ARE PILFERED.

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, THERE ARE CASES WHEN WHAT IS SOLD ARE THOSE WHICH ARE NEAR EXPIRY OR JUST A PRODUCTION SURPLUS WHICH HEALTHINESS IS NOT ENSURED.

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, A NOTORIOUS CAMPUS FOOD POISONING OCCURRED SOMEWHERE IN 1993, IN A CERTAIN UNIVERSITY WHERE A SHOCKING 20% OF COLLEGE STUDENTS GOT POISON FROM EATING A MONTH EXPIRED SPONGE CAKE. THE COLLEGIATE ADMINISTRATORS WERE MADE TO PAY FOR THE DAMAGES FOR EVERY VICTIMIZED STUDENT WHICH LATER RESULTED IN THE UNIVERISTY CLOSURE FOR LAWSUITS AND BANKRUPTCY. TO RECAPITULATE, WHILE THE BOONS ARE TRUE FOR THOSE SCHOOLS WHICH ALLOW COMMERCIAL PRODUCT PROMOTIONS IN THEIR RESPECTIVE PANTRY OR CAFETERIA, THE POTENTIAL DISADVANTAGES TOTALLY OUTWEIGHS THEM.

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, TO SAFEGUARD BOTH THE HEALTH AND SECURITY OF LEARNING CENTERS, IT WOULD BE FAR ADVANTAGEOUS FOR THEM TO CATER FOR A HEALTHY WELL-BALANCE SUSTENANCE.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

396 words

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Products
Benefit
Development
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Revenue
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Consumption patterns
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Some schools agree that fast-food restaurants and supermarkets can promote their products in school and that schools benefit from it. Is it a positive or negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

It is common that in many companies people from different ages work together in a same team. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantges?

Many social media accounts are fake What problems does ths cause? What Solatons can you suget?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?