Some schools agree that fast-food restaurants and supermarkets can promote their products in school and that schools benefit from it. Is it a positive or negative development?

THERE ARE SOME EDUCATIONAL INSTITUTIONS THAT ALLOW CERTAIN QUICK SERVICE RESTAURANTS AND GROCERY STORES TO SELL THEIR PRODUCTS INSIDE THE PREMISES IN EXCHANGE FOR SOME BENEFITS. WHILE THERE ARE FEW ADVANTAGES BEHIND
THIS
TREND, IN MY OPINION, IT IS AN OVERALL, NEGATIVE ONE. ON THE ONE HAND, IT IS UNDENIABLE THAT A
SCHOOL
GETS TO EARN BENEFITS FROM ALLOWING PRODUCT PROMOTIONS COMING FROM DIFFERENT BUSINESS INDUSTRY. MONEY, IN THE FORM OF EITHER DONATIONS OR SPONSORSHIPS, FROM ,ENTREPRENEURS CAN BE ADDED TO THE FUNDING FOR
SCHOOL
DEVELOPMENT.
FOR INSTANCE
, JOLLIBEE, A FAMOUS FILIPINO FAST FOOD RESTAURANTS WHO MOSTLY SELL THEIR PRODUCTS IN
SCHOOL
CANTEENS IN MOST SCHOOLS IN THE PHILLIPINES, OFTEN DONATES FOR
SCHOOL
PLANT'S IMPROVEMENTS
SUCH
AS BUILDING OF ADDITIONAL CLASSROOMS OR PROVIDING UNITS OF COMPUTER FOR LEARNING.
AS A RESULT
, LEARNERS AND FACULTY ARE BOTH BENEFITTED IN THE LONG RUN.
ADDITIONALLY
, FAMILY MEMBERS OF STUDENTS AND PERSONNELS FROM LEARNING FACILITIES WHERE A BUSINESS OPERATES OFTEN ENJOY
FURTHER
DISCOUNTS OR FREEBIES THROUGH FREE MEMBERSHIP. IN RETURN,
THIS
AIDS IN THE FINANCIAL SAVINGS TO THEIR PRIME CUSTOMERS.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, THESE ADVANTAGES SEEMED EXIGUOUS WHEN ITS BENEFITS ARE WEIGH TOGETHER.
FIRSTLY
, ANY COMMERCIAL GOODS ARE COMMONLY RATED AS UNHEALTHY. IN THE CASE OF FAST FOOD RESTAURANTS,
FOR INSTANCE
, WHICH EVERYBODY KNOWS, SELL UNHEALTHY SUSTENANCE WHICH WOULD HAVE A FAR-REACHING DELETERIOUS IMPACT ON ITS CUSTOMER'S WELLNESS.
THUS
, IT IS COMMON TO SEE CORPULENT STUDENTS ON
SCHOOL
CAMPUSES WHO SUPPORT BALANCE-NUTRIENT-DEPRIVED FOODS OR REFRESHMENTS. WHAT IS MORE, NOT EVERY PENNY GIVEN FOR
THIS
KIND OF PRODUCT PROMOTION GOES TO
SCHOOL
UPGRADATION PROJECTS. SOME, UNFORTUNATELY, ARE PILFERED.
ALSO
, THERE ARE CASES WHEN WHAT IS SOLD ARE THOSE WHICH ARE NEAR EXPIRY OR JUST A PRODUCTION SURPLUS WHICH HEALTHINESS IS NOT ENSURED.
FOR EXAMPLE
, A NOTORIOUS CAMPUS FOOD POISONING OCCURRED SOMEWHERE IN 1993, IN A CERTAIN UNIVERSITY WHERE A SHOCKING 20% OF COLLEGE STUDENTS GOT POISON FROM EATING A MONTH EXPIRED SPONGE CAKE. THE COLLEGIATE ADMINISTRATORS WERE MADE TO PAY FOR THE DAMAGES FOR EVERY VICTIMIZED STUDENT WHICH LATER RESULTED IN THE UNIVERISTY CLOSURE FOR LAWSUITS AND BANKRUPTCY. TO RECAPITULATE, WHILE THE BOONS ARE TRUE FOR THOSE SCHOOLS WHICH ALLOW COMMERCIAL PRODUCT PROMOTIONS IN THEIR RESPECTIVE PANTRY OR CAFETERIA, THE POTENTIAL DISADVANTAGES TOTALLY OUTWEIGHS THEM.
THUS
, TO SAFEGUARD BOTH THE HEALTH AND SECURITY OF LEARNING CENTERS, IT WOULD BE FAR ADVANTAGEOUS FOR THEM TO CATER FOR A HEALTHY WELL-BALANCE SUSTENANCE.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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