Task Some people believe that what children watch on television influences their behaviour. Others say that amount of time spent watching television influences their behaviour. Discuss both views and give own opinion

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In
this
modern times, watching
television
has become increasingly popular among
kids
.It is often argued that children's behaviour was effecting by the stuff which they usually watch on
tv
, whilst others disagree and reckon that it is the amount of time which they spent in front of
television
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the television
show examples
.
This
essay intends to analyse both perspectives.
however
,I am with the latter view.
To begin
with, there is a number of arguments given by those who advocate that
kids
are influencing by watching
tv
. today there are a vast number of cartoons and animation available on
tv
,which attracts a lot of teenagers .
Although
these shows and stuff are not real ,
it
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still can be able to affect children's behaviour.since they publish various sort of violent scenes
such
as murder, robbery.,which directly or indirectly impacting
kids
lifestyle.
For example
, recent research of
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the
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university of
manitoba
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Manitoba
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shows that about 80% of teenagers learning different soft of bad stuff by watching
tv
shows.
On the other hand
,it is
also
noticeable
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the noticeable
a noticeable
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fact that in today's generation children's watch
tv
whole
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the whole
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day they can live without food but they will not able to
spent
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spend
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a day without watching the
television
.Since many interesting and modern shows and animation available right now .so
kids
are highly attached
with
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those .
For instance
, research indicates that around 70%of
kids
spent their maximum amount of time watching
the
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apply
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television
.
Therefore
,it can
be say
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that
this
is the main reason why
tv
affecting teenagers behaviour. In conclusion,I would say different people can have different opinions on
this
issue as far as I am concerned I believe parents should allocate a specific time for
kids
to watch the
television
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence behaviour
  • violent content
  • inappropriate content
  • educational programs
  • role models
  • aggressive behaviour
  • positive behaviour
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • physical health issues
  • social interactions
  • social skills
  • parental involvement
  • moderate impact
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