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Today, more and more students are choosing to move to other countries to have higher education. Do you think the benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

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Moving abroad and studying overseas is a current trend among an increasing number of youngsters, nowadays. Even though there are some hardships they might face, I personally believe that advantageous aspects of
this
 change outdo its disadvantages. Starting a new life in a foreign country can be challenging for some reasons.
To begin
 with, while some
students
 are proficient in English
,
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 unless they know the language citizens speak, they will suffer from the language barriers on daily occasions.
Also
, despite prior preparation and orientation period, once they arrive at their destination, they will experience a cultural shock due to the differences in what people do and accept as normal. Especially,
students
 from under-developed countries will be exposed more to significant changes, as they have to adapt to a new education system, learn the transport system, and so on.
However
, despite all the aforementioned challenging aspects, studying abroad is a life-changing opportunity for university
students
.
First
 of all,
students
 can have a chance to select among the best universities based on which profession they want to pursue.
Secondly
, by being in contact with international
students
 and travelling abroad,
students
 are more likely to broaden their horizons.
Additionally
, in comparison to their peers who study at local universities, these
students
 will improve their critical thinking abilities while they solve every problem they face, as well as change their point of view.
Last
 but not least, studying abroad will enhance their success in job hunting both abroad and in their country. To conclude, while
students
 can have burdensome experiences during their education period abroad, the outcome of it is so utterly beneficial that
students
 should try
this
 opportunity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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