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Nowadays, many mothers take care of the family and don’t go out to work. Some believe they should be given salaries by government. Do you agree or disagree?

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Usually, every woman becomes a mother once in her life. Nowadays, some people say that mothers who take care of their families and do not go out for employment should be paid by the government.
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 of all, every mother should make a lot of efforts for the good care of her children and family and expect a bright future for both. It is
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 true that mothers are cold shadows. A mom's love for her household is the same regardless of her religion or nationality. Despite
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 fact, many have so much responsibility for their household that they do not have time to participate in any kind of employment. To illustrate, women who become part of a joint family after becoming mothers have to stay home without working outside, sacrificing their careers to support a large family.
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, after becoming a parent, a woman should manage her present while serving her in-laws in
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 a way that she can go out and take up a job or occupation according to her qualities and raise her family in a better way.
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, well-educated women do not stop working outside even after becoming a parent as it is a hobby of theirs and
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 helps the household financially and able to manage their whole day considering their younger ones and family members the most important
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, they get enough moments to enjoy with their family.
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, after the above discussion, I disagree that women do not go out and work at stay home just for the sake of being a parent and a responsible family member.
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, they need to manage their precious time in
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 a way that they can lead a happy life with equal attention to both their children and family.
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