It is a fact that a lot of Vietnamese students go abroad to study every year. However, studying in a foreign country has both advantages and disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, an increasing number of students choose to go to another

country

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for their higher education while studying abroad only has

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good points

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badpoints

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bad points

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essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages of

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trend. On the one hand, international students can make

profit

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a profit

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from studying abroad.

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, they can be provided

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broader, more inclusive, more advanced environment to learn, research and be exposed to.

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, it provides

an better job opportunities

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a better job opportunity

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during and

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postgraduate

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, they may learn and adopt innovative, constructive ideas and bring them to their own native

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in order to prosper their

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, moving

another

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to another

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country

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forces you to be more independent and not rely on family members.

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give

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them

opportunity

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the opportunity

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to confront any anxieties , you may become

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a more

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and more mature,

confident

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person

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. They would realize that they can do much more than they previously thought.

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, there are drawbacks too.

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, the adaptation and the fixation of it. One may find a new culture,

country

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, society difficult to adopt and can’t reach their full potential which was found in

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their native

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country

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, for the native

country

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, there’s

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the chance of losing talented adolescents. The young generation

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a tendency to settle down in a foreign

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for

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a more

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convenient, more prosperous life.

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good for individuals which damages the native

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which would never prosper if every talented individual chose to “escape” to another

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. What’s more, they would have language barriers. Definitely, any exchanged students have been in

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situation

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which makes them feel isolated, lost. In conclusion, studying abroad has both advantages and

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disadvantages

. I think advantages outweigh disadvantages

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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