in some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this ? What solutions can you suggest?

In the modern social young generation is considered as one of the primary

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, some share the view that in some nations, it is common for

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to work hard, resulting in not having much free

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extraordinary pressure from their study.

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and foremost, everyone wants to see their children do well in school and go on to have

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career.

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that they exert pressure on their children to spend hours each day studying at home.

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, another point to consider is that the world now is become more and more competitive which will be a trigger for young people to study harder on

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of better job opportunities and bright future.

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solution can be brought into

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discussion in order to surmount

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issue are various. One of the vital remedies is that parents and students should change their mind. They have a belief that education is not the only day to succeed in life. As a consequence, Micheal Dell gave up studying at the

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of

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at Austin to found Computer Corporation Dell Inc;

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, now he is on the list of the richest people in the world .

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good study result, they

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have others kind of outdoor activities which are done in their leisure

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but not least,

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education system and teacher should be

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table and

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from students namely reduce the amount of homework, encourage students

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their spare

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pursuing hobbies and doing what they want to do.

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young

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can improve social skills or creation and they have more motivation for studying. In a nutshell, it can be concluded that. It is no double that studying is the main role of children;

nonetheless

, they should be encouraged to take part in more recreational activities or social works, which will give them a large number of lessons and experience for their future development.