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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 can deny that some people believe that teenage
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 is the happiest
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, while others prefer to think that adult days give more happiness even if there is a many
responsibility
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. It is important to admit that both views have their own benefits. In
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 I will discuss the possible reasons that support each view, and what benefits they bring to society. On
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 hand, the option to think that the childhood days are most enjoyable for many convincing reasons. Most importantly, children do not have much responsibility to perform due to which they can enjoy their
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 without any tension. The perfect example to illustrate
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 is teenagers
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 not need to go out to earn money for their dependent
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 so that they can spend all their time on the activities which give them more pleasure like playing sports activity,
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 with friends and many more.
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 doing things of your choice without any burden is always fun.
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, despite the above argument, other people choose to believe that
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 of mature people is more happening for many obvious reasons.
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 of the main reason is that adults are independent to take their own decision without asking for anyone's permission. The best example is that a fully grown-up guy or a girl are allowed to take their own financial and personal decisions.
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, freedom of making your own choice is the happiest thing
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 can have. In conclusion, it seems to me that adult
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 gives more happiness compare to childhood days even though adults do have responsibilities as well. Because the benefits of freedom outweigh the drawbacks of the responsibility.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescence
  • fulfillment
  • responsibilities
  • exploration
  • long-term goals
  • sense of stability
  • carefree
  • contentment
  • well-being
  • life stage
  • unique opportunities
  • deep satisfaction
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