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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that it is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the world's is incredibly advanced.
Subsequently
, our planet is going to run out of resources. So, many people have a belief that the
earth
 will
died
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 in the future and, to live
in
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on
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other planet
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another planet
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,
such
 as Mars, is a choice. Personally, I agree
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this
 statement because of
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two reasons.
To begin
 with, at present, advanced technologies are
in
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everywhere.
Although
 humanity has extremely benefitted from them, our natural resources are always required to build and maintain them.
For example
, in order to produce
a
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paper, many trees were cut.
This
 can lead to the lack of trees and the global warming crisis. Ultimately, our
earth
 will be harmed. So, it is
the
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 better idea to conduct research about living on other planets to prevent humanity from extinction.
Moreover
, due to the growth of population in the world, it is very hard to take care of our
earth
. Many of our
daily
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 products are still necessary to manufactured from the
earth
's resources.
For example
, your car
need
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 oil but, oil is generated
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form
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 the underground of our
earth
.
Consequently
, if
to take
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 care of the
earth
 is difficult, it is good for us to have our civilization on other planets. To conclude, in my opinion, to live in other places far
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form
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earth
 is the best solution for our situation now.
However
, it is still important to take care of our
earth
 as much as possible so our
earth
 will
last
 forever.
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