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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problem of public. To what extent do you agree?

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Some
people
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 consider that the
government
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 should use
its
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it's
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 budget
tackle
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to tackle
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 human~ s
problems
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 rather than spending income on exploring
earth
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the earth
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 on other planets. The belief that solution of
people
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 s problem is the crucial factor, a
thought provoking
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 one and one that I believe in. On the one
hand
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 it is understandable why some
people
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 think
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government
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the government
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 has to focus on spending fund for human s
problems
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.
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Government
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 needs to promote Earth
planet
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 and our
planet
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 consist of human species.
Government
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 should regulate inner issues and encourage
people
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 for being in life.
Consequently
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, unless they solve environmental and economic
problems
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,
people
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 will witness
miserable
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life style
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lifestyle
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.
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,
as a result
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 of air or water pollution
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people
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 face
with
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health
problems
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. If the
government
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 did not intend to manage its responsibilities, it would not inherit health generation.
On the other hand
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, I am of the opinion that
government
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 officials should not only be engaged with public questions, but
also
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 might tend to demonstrate
their
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they're
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competent
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competence
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 in discovering
new
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a new
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 world.
Firstly
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, it is the way for improving
cutting
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the cutting
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 edge technology field.
Secondly
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, discovering new life eliminates
overloading
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the overloading
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 of our
planet
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.
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, half of
population
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the population
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 can be moved onto
new
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a new
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planet
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 by prevention of overpopulation on the Earth.
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, the officials can be awarded
by
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finance support for implementing
this
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 project. To conclude, while I admit that
government
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 should take care of population
problems
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, I do not believe that they should only deal with
society
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 problem as there are other factors.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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