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Many companies sponsor sports as a way for advertising themselves. Some people think it is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 believe that
sponsorship
 in sports, as a method of advertising, can have negative consequences, while others believe it is positive. I believe that negative consequences can arise from
this
 trend, but it is up to the sporting teams and
events
 to ensure the companies that sponsor them are moral and ethical and the products they sell do not have negative consequences on society.
Firstly
, without
sponsorship
, many sporting competitions and
events
 could not operate. Large sporting
events
,
such
 as the FIFA World Cup or the Olympics, require millions of dollars to organise and coordinate, and sponsors provide a lot of
this
 much-needed money. If there were no sponsors, the price of a spectator ticket would be extremely high as
this
 would be the only revenue to cover the costs of the event, and
as a result
, many
people
 could not afford to attend, which may leave the event organisers facing bankruptcy. On a smaller scale, many local children’s sporting
events
 and teams rely on local businesses for
sponsorship
.
For example
, when I was young, a local business supplied my
football
 team with jerseys and advertised their name and logo on the front of them. Without
this
sponsorship
, my
football
 club would not have been able to afford new
football
 jerseys each year for the players.
However
, there are some disadvantages that may occur when large sporting
events
 use
sponsorship
 from companies that produce products that have a negative impact on
people
 and society,
such
 as alcohol and tobacco companies. When young
people
 are exposed to certain advertising, they can easily develop a positive association with those products and start to use them. Imagine how many young
people
 could be influenced by watching the World Cup
football
 competition. In conclusion,
sponsorship
 in sports can have both positive and negative outcomes, yet it is up to the sporting teams and
events
 to make sure that the sponsors they use will not have a negative influence on
people
 and society.
Submitted by Uyen Dinh on

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