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Some universities now offer their courses on the internet so that people can study online. Is it a positive or negative development?

#universities #offer #courses #internet #people #study #development
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Today
people
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 are beginning to realize that technological developments
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 them to have a comfortable life. Many educational institutions provide
students
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 with
a more convenient methods
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 of studies by setting online courses.
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,
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 essay will discuss why learning online should be avoided according to several problems. It cannot be denied that
students
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 tend to have freedom in choosing their study's places.
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, their parents need to pay for either expensive devices or network services which may increase the family's expenses in
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 long term because they have their lifespan.
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, studying online can decrease
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 quality of learning due to an unstable connection when
people
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 take the course at the same period of time. The signal
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 equally divided in each house.
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, they can miss some important sentences.
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,
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 onsite tend to force
students
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 to pay attention in class.
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, teachers can give both knowledge and sociability so children's manners are adjusted and developed by their advisors. In some lesson, the house is not suitable for outdoor activities
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, doing experiments and dramatic activities. Equally important, studying online can cause
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social inequality because
people
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 have an unequal financial status. Some areas are difficult to access unless the majority agrees to let these groups of
people
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 have less chance to study. In conclusion,
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people
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 are likely to have a wonderful lifestyle by modern technologies. They must have a huge amount of money to support efficient education.
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,
students
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 cannot control the signal to flow perfectly. Ultimately, online courses can bring a big issue to
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society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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