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Longer life spans and improvement in the health care suggest that older people can continue to live full and active lives.

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It is obvious that
people
 desire to spend their limited time with either family or someone whom they love.
Therefore
, medical developments are improved by many experts to support health care and the population lifespan in order to keep them live longer.
This
 essay will explore why
this
 improvement is beneficial to the majority.
Firstly
,
people
 started to gain knowledge regarding
the
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health care due to a huge number of dead in many
last
 decades according to some pandemics and dangerous diseases with no essential treatment. Many professional stimulate
people
 to have more awareness in living.
Consequently
, most elders can live full and active lives. Undoubtedly, they help to maintain the balance in their family by nurturing the old tradition and giving some advice which always
control
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people
 from making
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 decision.
Moreover
, they can look after their grandchild when the busy parents go to work which can reduce the family's expenses in hiring some nannies.
Event
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 bough they stop working, they tend to provide knowledge about historical events, places and , materials to the population through social media which might be
an useful information
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 for
further
 education of children.
In addition
,
this
 kind of data may let archaeologists work easier and broaden some ways to upgrade ancient tourist attractions
thus
 the economy will grow,
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 as same as exchanging national culture and ideal. In conclusion,
although
 the old person cannot take a job.they are worth
to live
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npby
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by
 taking advantages back to their community.
Similarly
, they are the
center
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 of their family's members and guiding the way of life from their own experiences. Ultimately their knowledge might necessary for the country development.
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