Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
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believe that it is important to invest vastly in building large outdoor public spaces for
cities
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and town. It is indisputable that metropolis
cities
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are now full
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skyscraper buildings without
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greenery views which lead to
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mental health problems in many
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dwellers. I believe that nature and outdoor
space
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are important for the big
cities
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. It is a tendency to believe that many
people
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who live in bustling
cities
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suffer
with
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depression and
stress
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.
According to recent
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researches show that the percentage of
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who committed suicide due to
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in
workplace
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is rapidly increased over
in
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a decade.
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, there are big numbers of Japanese who committed suicide in their workplace due to working overloaded.
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, the metro police
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tends to have
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cost of living, particularly in the accommodation.
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, many
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can afford to live only in
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small apartments where no good facilities enough to help them relieve their
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from work.
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, it is very important for the government to invest heavily
building
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large outdoor public spaces for
people
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so they can have
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for
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leisure activities.
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, New York
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is the most bustling
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in America and there are plenty of skyscrapers.
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, there is a huge public
park
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call Central
park
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which located in
downtown
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city
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.
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park
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has an astonishing view of greenery trees and
lake
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a lake
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that you can see from the windows of
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the building
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around the
park
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.
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is why outdoor public
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may help
city
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dwellers to relieve their
stress
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because
people
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can go to
picnic
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a picnic
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in the
park
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and meet their friends after their work or exercise
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as jogging or running around the
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during their free time. In conclusion, I strongly agree that it is important for
cities
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and town to building large outdoor public
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to maintain
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good mental health for
people
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who live in
cities
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.
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