More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are possible solutions?

#people #countries #cars #first #time

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

People

Use synonyms

are starting to buy cars

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

because it's affordable and it's necessary. There are indeed various disadvantages of

this

Linking Words

approach, which let us to

this

Linking Words

essay, where we will talk about how can we resolve the problem coming with the fact, that more

people

Use synonyms

in wealthier countries buy automobiles. In the

first

Linking Words

place, I would like to share the reasons, why more

people

Use synonyms

are investing in

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

car

Use synonyms

purchase these days. One of the motives is that

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

to buy an acceptable vehicle these days, especially in developing countries, is more affordable than ever.

For instance

Linking Words

, an

avarage

Correct your spelling

average

person with an ordinary job can save money for a few years and

thereafter

Linking Words

can be able to afford a nice

car

Use synonyms

model.

Additionaly

Correct your spelling

Additionally

Additional

to have

Change the verb form

having

show examples

a vehicle is a necessity.

For example

Linking Words

, if a person has to travel 2 hours

with

Change preposition

show examples

train to get to work,

than

Replace the word

then

show examples

buying a

car

Use synonyms

will save the person some time.

However

Linking Words

, the increasing number of

people

Use synonyms

investing in cars is leading to more environmental pollution. Especially in the big cities like New York or London

people

Use synonyms

can not go anywhere without a

car

Use synonyms

, no matter if it is owned or borrowed, if it is a taxi or a public transport, because of the large distances.

As a result

Linking Words

, the air in those cities gets polluted, which affects the health of the whole country's nation. Not

concidentially

Correct your spelling

coincidentally

confidentially

, USA remains statistically the most polluted country in the world, because of its major towns and large roads. In conclusion, I can suggest a conceivable solution namely electric cars.

The electric

Correct article usage

Electric

show examples

automobiles do not pollute the air, that we breathe, and are environmentally friendly. If they get cheaper, more

people

Use synonyms

would be able to afford them and

consequently

Linking Words

buy them.

This

Linking Words

kind of

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

implication would improve the quality of life in the different countries.

Submitted by plami98573 on Tue May 11 2021

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

305 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6
band
You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
hope this letter finds you in a radiant health and best of the spirits. I am writing this letter with regard to a suggestion for you whether to start the university or to find a job.
5.5
band
Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think this can have negative effects on children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the modern era, a substantial portion of advertising targets children, prompting concerns about its potential adverse impacts. While some advocate for a complete prohibition of such advertising aimed at youngsters, I partially agree with this notion, acknowledging the detrimental effects it may impart, but I believe that a complete ban might not be the most effective solution.
8
band
Some people think that printed books are no longer needed in the digital era, because all writing can be stored electronically. Others think printed books will still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Over the past few decades, there has been a tremendous increase in the utilisation of electronic devices to store information. While some may argue that printed material are not required, others think that it will play a crucial role in keeping track of data. This essay will discuss these two viewpoints and come to a logical conclusion.
7
band
These days many people have their own computeres and telephones, so it is quite easy for them to work at home. DOes working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages
It is undeniable that in recent years due to technological advancement, many employees prefer to work from home rather than work from the office. They can simply do their tasks from their houses using computers and smartphones. Although there are a few drawbacks to these preferences, I certainly believe that the advantages will outcome them.
5
band
The plans show the layout of a public library now and how it will look after development
Contained in the blueprint is the information pertaining to the alterations of public library at present and in the future.

More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are possible solutions?

Your opinion

Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think this can have negative effects on children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that printed books are no longer needed in the digital era, because all writing can be stored electronically. Others think printed books will still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

These days many people have their own computeres and telephones, so it is quite easy for them to work at home. DOes working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages

The plans show the layout of a public library now and how it will look after development