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Many say that international students should reside in university dormitories while others think shared community housing is better. What are the advantages of both? Which approach do you favour? Give reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays, youngsters prefer to study abroad to pursue higher studies. Some people say that these students should choose academic hostels to stay and others support the notion of students staying in shared community housing.
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 of each trend and give my personal opinion on
this
 topic. On the one hand, others often give paramount importance to live in
hostel
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 for two main reasons.
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 is mainly due to the fact that students do not have to do daily activities
such
 as, cooking, washing, cleaning, which means that, they can concentrate more on
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.
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, if a child is pursuing engineering,
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 he may not get time to cook during
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exam time.
Furthermore
, in
hostel
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, there are children of
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 age group which makes it comfortable for them to mingle and gel up with each other. Seen in
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 light, education dormitories can be looked
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 a good option.
On the other hand
, the detractors do not agree with the aforementioned standpoint, because they think that shared community housing is affordable than hostel. The reason for
this
 is if a child is staying in common society,
then
 they are charged less compared to education facilities.
In other words
, a child can save on rent and can use it for his tuition fees.
Moreover
, these communities
also
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similar cultural offerings, which
further
 eliminate their homesickness as their language of communication is similar regardless of the topic of discussion.
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, by speaking to
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 language in
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society, children can get more comfortable even after being away from the family. To recapitulate, both the accommodations
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 their own positive points which cannot be neglected. In my opinion, an international student should choose to stay in community houses which can give
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 feeling of their home back in their own country so that they do not feel lonely.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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