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Some students work while studying, resulting in a lack of time for education and constant pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

In recent years, many
students
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 who
work
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while
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 studying have faced insufficient time for learning and high levels of stress. There are various possible reasons for
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, but steps can definitely be taken to address
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 issue.
To begin
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 with, there are two main factors contributing to the problem of restless individuals who lack enough time because they
work
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 and study simultaneously.
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, the rising cost of tuition fees and living expenses has forced
students
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 to take full-time jobs in order to avoid debt.
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, a 2019 study in the United States reported that 65% of learners could not afford the high cost of tuition, which ultimately led them to
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 long shifts.
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, most employers require graduates to have
work
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 experience, which causes
students
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 to feel stressed about gaining the necessary experience before graduation. To combat
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 problem, governments and universities could implement several measures. The government can provide support,
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 as financial aid, scholarships, and subsidised housing, for disadvantaged individuals to pursue their studies without the risk of burnout from long working hours.
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, the Saudi Arabian government offers undergraduates a grant of 990 riyals per month, thereby improving
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'
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 GPAs.
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, colleges can create structured internship programmes that integrate paid
work
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 with academic learning during the final year, which equips individuals with the skills needed to enter the workforce.
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, educational institutions can not only guide
students
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 through time- and stress-management workshops but help them deal with current and future obstacles.
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, numerous working
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 may face enormous pressure
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 the lack of sufficient time to study. I am convinced that the challenge can be tackled through internship programmes and financial support from authorities.

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structure
Explain causes and effects with one simple idea per paragraph and keep the idea clear
language
Use short, easy sentences. Break long sentences into two parts
structure
Make the end link to the start. In the intro, say what you will do.
content
Add more clear facts or examples for each cause and show how the fix helps
structure
The essay has a clear plan: problem, solution, and end.
content
It uses some examples well, such as a stat and aid plan.

Your opinion

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