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The most school offers some type of physical education program to their students. Why is it important? Should physical education classes be required or optional?

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In today's world, Physical
education
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 has found
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an importance
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importance
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 place in
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 curriculum. Many believe, it is necessary for the development of a child, while other think, it is redundant to include physical
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 in the syllabus and
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, and
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,
students
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 should be given a choice to select over other subjects.
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, I put forth my argument that
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 in active
sports
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 is vital for the overall grooming of young individuals learning at schools.
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 with, People who opine that physical studies should be kept secondary subjects, give the reason that there are other knowledge areas that have gained popularity in the existing world, which will reap multiple benefits in the near future of a scholar.
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, teenagers these days are opting for the most popular computer programming courses over active courses
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 as playing cricket and football.
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, due to
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 situation, physical
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 is kept at bay by many
students
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 by and large.
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, there are a plethora of reasons to have physical
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 inculcated in pedagogical institutions curriculum.
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, it helps in the overall physical development of the youngsters.
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, It provides a surrounding where
students
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 can refine their social skills and enhance
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 enhance their team participation, in the case of group
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.
Last
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 but not the least, research has shown that active participation in
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 enhances the learning skills of a person due to
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 involvement of the brain in the game. If
students
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 are not introduced to competitive physical
sports
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 at an early age, it might have a detrimental effect on their growth. In conclusion, considering the popularity of the other courses and the importance of physical
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. whatsoever is the period. I believe that
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 is mandatory by all means and should not be ignored in
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the early
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 stage of growth of the
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.
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