In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urb

From evidence developing countries over the world, it seems inevitable that economic growth is generated business industrial
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of major cities. Urban people have access to jobs as well as facilities which improving their standards of living considerably.
Nonetheless
, it is
also
plain truth that these benefits is not equally enjoyed by rural people, and
this
triggers the problems of countries as a whole. In a
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it can be concluded that
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growth of a country exerts a number large of problems for that country in a broad sense
such
as not equally or the standards of living between regions and more vitally is unstable social security.
Therefore
, numerous remedies as mention above need to be done simultaneously to complete the problem, ensure sustainable
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rather than mutation
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • moreover
  • also
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