many people think government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Using genetically modified food
products
can have many benefits.
However
, there are many people who think that
this
can have many problems. I, strongly, believe that
this
statement is true because
this
can harm non-GM
products
and
its
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farmers.
This
essay shall support my view in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, the engineered plants can travel and attack other fields, which can bring a serious ecological imbalance. The modified items can have better quality, size, and taste, along with high immunity power.
Therefore
, these can fight against harmful organisms and grow fastly and healthy, eventually, other fields can
be perished
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perish
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.
For example
, it has been noticed that when these modified seeds were introduced in some part of the world, it was spread to the entire
place
and destructed traditional plants, which were cultivated for a prolonged time.
Secondly
, since the bio-engineered
products
have better qualities, the bio-medical companies would take over the farming system and the farmers may not have a
place
that
deserve
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deserves
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them. Apart from
this
, customers often prefer
the
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apply
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foods that have
imbalance
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an imbalance
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. The modified items can have better quality, size, and taste, along with high immunity power.
Therefore
, these can fight against harmful organisms and grow fastly and healthy, eventually, other fields can
be perished
Change to the active voice
perish
show examples
.
For example
, it has been noticed that when these modified seeds were introduced in some part of the world, it was spread to the entire
place
and destructed traditional plants, which were cultivated for a prolonged time.
Secondly
, since the bio-engineered
products
have better qualities, the bio-medical companies would take over the farming system and the farmers may not have a
place
that
deserve
Change the verb form
deserves
show examples
them. Apart from
this
, customers often prefer the foods that have
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • holistic development
  • technological advancements
  • critical thinking
  • cultural awareness
  • sustainable development
  • return on investment (ROI)
  • global competitiveness
  • job market
  • equitable education
  • funding allocation
  • curriculum balance
  • civic responsibilities
  • interdisciplinary approach
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