Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends. Others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and appreciation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Factory farming is so popular

these day

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this day

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since

this

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meets the increasing demands of food requirement.

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, there are many people who think that

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can have many repercussions on humans as well as the earth. I, personally, believe that

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statement is true and I

support

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, in intensive farming, a high level anti-biotic has been used, which can lead

antibiotic

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resistence

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resistance

among micro-organisms. Eventually, the present, antibiotic treatments are ineffective for most of the superbugs.

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, in Europe in the early

1990’s

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due to the booming of

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apply

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modern farming methods, they used antibiotics in an uncontrolled manner, which resulted in superbug formation.

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, currently, they

follows

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strict policies regarding factory

faming

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farming

to eliminate

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damaging

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to humans.

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, animals are kept in

a cramped and unhygienic places

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cramped and unhygienic places

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, where animals are tortured.

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, to maximise the benefits , the genetic components of the animals were

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manipulate. Since they required a huge amount

feed

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, forests were razed to plant more feeds.

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, to increasing egg, milk, meat production, goats, cows, hens and so on were modified.

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clear violation of animal rights and many people started to fight

against

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. By seeing, the scenarios,

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navel technique has more negatives effects on our environment than any minor advantages it can bring. In conclusion, opinion on adapting bioengineering in animal production divides people into two groups. In my consideration, the farming methods have serious problems that harm the entire planet as

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causes antibiotic

resistence

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resistance

and deforestation widely.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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