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Factory farming is so popular

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since

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meets the increasing demands of food requirement.

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, there are many people who think that

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, in intensive farming, a high level anti-biotic has been used, which can lead

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resistence

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among micro-organisms. Eventually, the present, antibiotic treatments are ineffective for most of the superbugs.

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, in Europe in the early

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modern farming methods, they used antibiotics in an uncontrolled manner, which resulted in superbug formation.

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strict policies regarding factory

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to humans.

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, animals are kept in

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, where animals are tortured.

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, to maximise the benefits , the genetic components of the animals were

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, to increasing egg, milk, meat production, goats, cows, hens and so on were modified.

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clear violation of animal rights and many people started to fight

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. By seeing, the scenarios,

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navel technique has more negatives effects on our environment than any minor advantages it can bring. In conclusion, opinion on adapting bioengineering in animal production divides people into two groups. In my consideration, the farming methods have serious problems that harm the entire planet as

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causes antibiotic

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resistance

and deforestation widely.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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