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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#sports #professionals #money #people #professions
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Some
people
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 think that it is fair enough
sports
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 professional
players
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 have been received high
salaries
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; others, including myself, believe that it is unjustified due to educational degree and unimportant social roles.
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 and foremost, I think
people
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's income has to be related by how much
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 they deduction to study.
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, it seems to be fair that individuals who have university degrees earn much more than others with low or no university degrees. As you know, most
sports
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players
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 have not any academic experiences even for a year, whereas a physician has been studied for a long
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, even seven or ten years. They have to pass the challenging course, while most professional's
players
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 do not have to contribute any scientific course.
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, the player's social role is not essential. It is better to say that more money is eligible for
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 with vital roles
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 as doctors, nurses, or firefighters who play a central and vital role in our society.
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 events mostly hold fun and recreational
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;
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,
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players
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' roles are not eligible to earn a great deal.
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, some
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 think that
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players
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 invest in their body health and cannot work for a long
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. They believe that the professional player's income is temporary.
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 it is reasonable if they earn more money than other professional occupations.
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, it is an entirely unfair reason because, on some occasions, the salary for one year of
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 might equal five years'
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 of a professional physician. By way of conclusion,
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 many factors are in play when it comes to the concept of earning high
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, I believe both educational's level and social's role are essential two essential items that have to consider in professional's
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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