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Nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because people follow the same media. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the globalization era, it can be seen that
people
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 from all over the world follow similar fashion, television programs, music bands or even have the same
food
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 to eat. From my point of view,
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 has more benefits to society than drawbacks. I will examine both views before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, the development of technology has provided positive sides to society these days.
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, it allows the population in every country to become closer and be able to learn different traditions and cultures through technology.
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, Clubhouse, an application
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 a platform to communicate with other
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. Discussing an idea through Clubhouse is providing new knowledge to individuals because everyone comes from different places.
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, it could reduce a barrier of education that occurred from poverty because there is no charge for downloading
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 application.
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, it is undeniable that a unique tradition or culture in each country disappeared because of
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 similar lifestyle. Thailand is a perfect example in
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 case. Thai citizens have received a myriad of Korean culture from Korean movies
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 or dress, and it can be seen that Thai
people
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 lose their identity by following the Korean style.
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, several cultures do not suitable for every person.
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, American
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,
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 as hamburgers, is not proper
food
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 for Thai
people
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 because the carbohydrate is overloaded. In conclusion,
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 there are several negative sides
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 the media, I believe that the advantages of
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 issue outweigh the disadvantages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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