The pie charts below show the data regarding the time people spend on smartphones and tablets, divided by category.
INFORMATION CONCERNING THE DURATION OF
TIME
SPENT BY SMARTPHONE AND TABLET Use synonyms
USERS
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ACCORDING TO
SIX ACTIVITIES IS DEPICTED ON THE GIVEN PIE CHARTS.
Linking Words
OVERALL
, WHAT IS NOTABLE IS THATLinking Words
,
GAMES AND SOCIAL NETWORKING ARE Remove the comma
apply
TWO
MOST POPULAR ACTIVITIES AMONG THE GADGET Correct article usage
THE TWO
USERS
.
AS PER THE CHART, GAMES Use synonyms
IS
RESPONSIBLE FOR THE LION'S SHARE OF TOTAL Correct subject-verb agreement
ARE
TIME
SPENT ON SMARTPHONES AND TABLETS, AT 35% AND 57% RESPECTIVELY. MEANWHILE, THE Use synonyms
SECOND
MOST POPULAR Linking Words
ACTIVTY
WHERE BOTH GADGET Correct your spelling
ACTIVITY
USERS
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ALLOCATES
MOST OF THEIR SCREEN Correct subject-verb agreement
ALLOCATE
TIME
IS SOCIAL NETWORKING, WITH A RATE OF JUST UNDER TWO-THIRDS FOR THE MOBILE PHONES AND JUST OVER A TENTH FOR OTHER GIZMO.
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FURTHERMORE
, WHEN Linking Words
DURATION
OF Correct article usage
THE DURATION
TIME
SPENT ON SMARTPHONES FOR NEWS GATHERING, ENTERTAINMENT AND Use synonyms
UTILITIES
PURPOSES ACCOUNT FOR A COLLECTIVE RATE OF 31%, THSI FIGURE IS 11% MORE THAN THAT OF COLLECTIVE PROPORTIONS FOR TABLET Change the noun form
UTILITY
USERS
(20%). Use synonyms
FINALLY
, THE REMAINING CATEGORY WHICH DOES NOT FIT IN THE FIVE GIVEN Linking Words
CATEGORY
IS RESPONSIBLE FOR JUST UNDER A TENTH (5%) AND ALMOST A TENTH (8%) Fix the agreement mistake
CATEGORIES
FOR
CELLPHONES AND TABLETS, SEQUENTIALLY.Change preposition
OF
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