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The pie charts below show the data regarding the time people spend on smartphones and tablets, divided by category.

The pie charts below show the data regarding the time people spend on smartphones and tablets, divided by category.
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INFORMATION CONCERNING THE DURATION OF
TIME
 SPENT BY SMARTPHONE AND TABLET
USERS
ACCORDING TO
 SIX ACTIVITIES IS DEPICTED ON THE GIVEN PIE CHARTS.
OVERALL
, WHAT IS NOTABLE IS THAT
,
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 GAMES AND SOCIAL NETWORKING ARE
TWO
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THE TWO
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 MOST POPULAR ACTIVITIES AMONG THE GADGET
USERS
. AS PER THE CHART, GAMES
IS
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ARE
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 RESPONSIBLE FOR THE LION'S SHARE OF TOTAL
TIME
 SPENT ON SMARTPHONES AND TABLETS, AT 35% AND 57% RESPECTIVELY. MEANWHILE, THE
SECOND
 MOST POPULAR
ACTIVTY
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ACTIVITY
 WHERE BOTH GADGET
USERS
ALLOCATES
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 MOST OF THEIR SCREEN
TIME
 IS SOCIAL NETWORKING, WITH A RATE OF JUST UNDER TWO-THIRDS FOR THE MOBILE PHONES AND JUST OVER A TENTH FOR OTHER GIZMO.
FURTHERMORE
, WHEN
DURATION
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THE DURATION
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 OF
TIME
 SPENT ON SMARTPHONES FOR NEWS GATHERING, ENTERTAINMENT AND
UTILITIES
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UTILITY
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 PURPOSES ACCOUNT FOR A COLLECTIVE RATE OF 31%, THSI FIGURE IS 11% MORE THAN THAT OF COLLECTIVE PROPORTIONS FOR TABLET
USERS
 (20%).
FINALLY
, THE REMAINING CATEGORY WHICH DOES NOT FIT IN THE FIVE GIVEN
CATEGORY
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CATEGORIES
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 IS RESPONSIBLE FOR JUST UNDER A TENTH (5%) AND ALMOST A TENTH (8%)
FOR
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OF
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 CELLPHONES AND TABLETS, SEQUENTIALLY.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital devices
  • Proportion
  • Communication
  • Entertainment
  • Work-related tasks
  • Productivity
  • Miscellaneous activities
  • Time distribution
  • Prevalence
  • Dedicate
  • Allocate
  • Examine
  • Observation
  • Impact
  • Time management
  • Edit documents
  • Professional communication
  • Personal finance management
  • Streaming services
  • Social media platforms
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