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Many people say that we have developed into a ―throw-away‖ culture, because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To what extent do you agree with this opinion and what measures can you recommend reducing this problem?

#people #―throw-away‖ #culture #environment #plastic #bags #rubbish #measures
The
environment
 is one of the most important
role
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 in the world's system. Most
people
 thought that our
environment
 is getting worse because it is
fulled
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filled
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with
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of
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garbages
 from
bad
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the bad
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 behaviours of human.
This
 essay will argue why
this
 statement should be agreed
.
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upon.
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 As you could see,
acts
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the acts
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 of today's
people
 are not friendly to
the
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apply
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nature; to throw away rubbish into the
environment
 becomes their habits. Naturally, human likes convenience so that
people
 usually throw away their
garbages
 for the reason that there
are
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 no bin.
As a result
,
the
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nature is harmed.
Moreover
, not only rubbish is thrown inappropriately on the land but
also
 on the surface of the ocean.
Subsequently
, all parts of our
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world
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wold
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world
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 can be
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filled
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fulled
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filled
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with
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of
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 human's
garbages
.
For example
, at present,
the
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plastic is one of the most
concerned
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 topics of
the
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apply
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environment
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environmental
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 problems. Plastic is everywhere, from air to the bottom of the ocean and
this
 leads to harming animals
such
 as
plastic eating
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.
However
, there is a way to save our
environment
 from getting worse. Education and knowledge is the key factor of solving
this problems
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 because they will stick to
people
's minds. When they know what the large drawbacks and effects will occur to our ecosystem when they do not get rid of
garbages
 properly, they will remember and their behaviours will be better. To conclude, I totally
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agree
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agee
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agree
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 that the ecosystem is getting worse because of human's inappropriate habits.
Consequently
, we should do our best to our
envrionement
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environment
 with changing our habits to save the nature.
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