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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this.

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It is undeniable that the
media
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 is one of the best and easy ways to spread the word. Especially, Nowadays the Internet is the crucial technology that made all of
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communication easier and faster than before, So
people
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 are heavily influenced by the news on social. From my point of view, I personally agree with
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 viewpoint for many reasons, described in the following paragraphs.
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 with, in many countries the government uses
media
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 to their own advantage and try to control
people
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's opinions via News.
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 in North Korea
people
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 are strictly limited from other
media
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, they can’t read or find out anything by themselves. except The news and information are allowed from the North Korean government. That the reasons why the government can
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 the population’ opinions and attitudes so easily. Only a Few
people
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 can seek the truth owning to everything in the country is blocked
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, Some democratic countries
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 got
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 problem. Not only
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the politics
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 sector but
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Trading
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the Trading
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 sector. There are a lot of bad business groups or political parties in each country
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 social
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 like Facebook, IG or Tiktok to promote
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their business and the pieces of information were recorded in a huge database in order to analyze data. After that, they can use the data to inoculate in
people
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’s mind
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 Donald Trump won the election by using Facebook ads. In conclusion,
people
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 have been dominated for years by the
media
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 from everywhere.
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, In the era of globalization, a politician and The rich can control opinions and attitudes of the
people
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 by using data in the social
media
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.
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