Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
These days, An increasing of
people
who crazy about sports
are one of the reasons why athlete
are rich. Many people
think that sports
professionals
deserve to have an enormous salary since they can give people
a happy, relaxed feeling. While other people
who don’t like sports
claim that it is unfair. From my point of view, I think it is acceptable.
Firstly
, sports
professionals
spend a lot of time in daily life to practice. Some athlete
spend time almost half of their life with practice every day for only one match such
as the player in Olympic games have to practice a lot and some athlete
has trained since they were young. Their success can draw people
's attention from around the world after that they would receive enormous money or gifts from many fans, especial with Olympic athletes in each country are treated and got all of the love from the government and people
in the country ,However
some athlete
who can't reach the goal because not everyone can get a chance for making a good reputation for themselves.
On the other hand
, I believe that in the other careers can earn as much as sports
professionals
can, It depends on their effort, such
as the Miss Universe is one of the most highly competitive all
types of careers, Only the winner would receive a prize and got a reputation. as well as a doctor not only can earn money a lot Correct quantifier usage
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in
each year but Change preposition
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also
a stable career. It might be better than a general athlete
In conclusion, In my point of view
Successful athletics Add a comma
,view
professionals
should deserve a high salary. Although
sports
professionals
are not the only career to make money but
there are others who can make high income as well.Remove the conjunction
apply
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