Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

These days, An increasing of
people
who crazy about
sports
are one of the reasons why
athlete
are rich. Many
people
think that
sports
professionals
deserve to have an enormous salary since they can give
people
a happy, relaxed feeling. While other
people
who don’t like
sports
claim that it is unfair. From my point of view, I think it is acceptable.
Firstly
,
sports
professionals
spend a lot of time in daily life to practice. Some
athlete
spend time almost half of their life with practice every day for only one match
such
as the player in Olympic games have to practice a lot and some
athlete
has trained since they were young. Their success can draw
people
's attention from around the world after that they would receive enormous money or gifts from many fans, especial with Olympic athletes in each country are treated and got all of the love from the government and
people
in the country ,
However
some
athlete
who can't reach the goal because not everyone can get a chance for making a good reputation for themselves.
On the other hand
, I believe that in the other careers can earn as much as
sports
professionals
can, It depends on their effort,
such
as the Miss Universe is one of the most highly competitive
all
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types of careers, Only the winner would receive a prize and got a reputation. as well as a doctor not only can earn money a lot
in
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each year but
also
a stable career. It might be better than a general
athlete
In conclusion, In my point of
view
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Successful athletics
professionals
should deserve a high salary.
Although
sports
professionals
are not the only career to make money
but
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there are others who can make high income as well.
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  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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