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In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views?

#countries #children #education #four #years #school #seven #eight
Nowadays, some
countries
 allow people to bring their children
at
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school
 from
three
 or
four
 years old. In fact, from their own point of view, it is important to educate juvenile starting from that age.
On the contrary
, there are
countries
 that decided that kids do not have to start
school
 until they are seven or eight because it could increase stress in their growing mind. In
this
 essay, I will try to discuss both views and
finally
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 I would like to state my own opinion regarding the matter. On the one hand, many
countries
 realize that
a
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school
 education could rise kid's stress. In fact, in their opinion, it is important that before they decided to go to
school
 they must know the importance of gaming, relationship and the knowledge of themselves without restrictions that
school
 usually do.
Moreover
,
phsycologists
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psychologists
physiologists
 believe that
school
 institutes stopped the real fantasy and creativity that childrens' mind should express.
On the other hand
, there are
countries
 that obligate their community
to begin
school
 education starting from
three
 or
four
 years. In fact, they believe that it is important to
obtained
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 a future better society
,
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 because
a
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good behaviour is
teached
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 commence
our
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 young age.
In addition
,
also
 from a "medical" point of view, it is recognized that starting from our
first
three
 or
four
 ages, our mind is in a development situation and for
this
reason
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 it is important to teach them what is right to do and
viceversa
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vice versa
vice-versa
.
Therefore
,
school
 authorities represent an important figure for children and especially their
next
 adult life. To conclude, it is difficult to choose what is the greatest choice for the government authorities, but I personally agree that academies represent and will represent the only authority that will save our world starting from kids
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three
 or
four
ages
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.
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