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Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause and suggest a possible solution.

#over-reliance #cars
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It is not surprising that the
problems
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 of too much dependency on
cars
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 attracted many heated debates because of
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 impact on
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society on the whole. In
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 topic, and try to suggest some possible solutions to overcome
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 disturbing
problem
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. There is no doubt that there are many
problems
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 one can come
accross
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across
 due to too much addiction
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 automobiles. The biggest
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 it can cause is air pollution which will
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surrounding
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 environment
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 there is a high
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 of health issues for residents around. Considering
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 volume of vehicles can create traffic
problem
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 too. A good example to illustrate the
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problems
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 is the capital city of India, Delhi which is one of the highest air pollutant city
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 the world because of
large
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a large
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 number of motor
cars
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 running
everyday
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 over there. Due to air pollution, the city is
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 registering
highest
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 number of lung cancer patients. Looking at the above
problems
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, the best solution I would suggest is that,
people
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 need to
use
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 or
a
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public transport like Metro or buses which creates almost no or less pollution compare to
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motor vehicles. The best illustration for
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 is most of the
Europe
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 countries where
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the majority
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people
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use
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 bicycles to visit an office or for any other work .
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, you will find
more
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the more
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 clean environment and healthy
people
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 there.
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,
people
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 should always
ecouraged
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encouraged
to
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use
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less
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 motor
cars
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 and opt for more
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 options to commute. In conclusion, the
problem
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 of extreme
use
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 of
cars
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 could be sensibly and easily tackled if the above measures are taken into consideration and shared by both the concerned authorities and the general public.
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