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Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause and suggest a possible solution.

#over-reliance #cars
It is not surprising that the
problems
 of too much dependency on
cars
has
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 attracted many heated debates because of
its
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 impact on
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society on the whole. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the major causes relating to
this
 topic, and try to suggest some possible solutions to overcome
this
 disturbing
problem
. There is no doubt that there are many
problems
 one can come
accross
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across
 due to too much addiction
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 automobiles. The biggest
problem
 it can cause is air pollution which will
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surrounding
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 environment
as a result
 there is a high
chances
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 of health issues for residents around. Considering
high
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 volume of vehicles can create traffic
problem
 too. A good example to illustrate the
above mentioned
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problems
 is the capital city of India, Delhi which is one of the highest air pollutant city
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 the world because of
large
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a large
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 number of motor
cars
 running
everyday
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 over there. Due to air pollution, the city is
also
 registering
highest
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 number of lung cancer patients. Looking at the above
problems
, the best solution I would suggest is that,
people
 need to
use
bicycle
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a bicycle
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 or
a
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public transport like Metro or buses which creates almost no or less pollution compare to
the
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motor vehicles. The best illustration for
this
 is most of the
Europe
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 countries where
majority
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the majority
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people
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of people
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use
 bicycles to visit an office or for any other work .
Hence
, you will find
more
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the more
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 clean environment and healthy
people
 there.
Therefore
,
people
 should always
ecouraged
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encouraged
to
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use
less
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 motor
cars
 and opt for more
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 options to commute. In conclusion, the
problem
 of extreme
use
 of
cars
 could be sensibly and easily tackled if the above measures are taken into consideration and shared by both the concerned authorities and the general public.
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