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Some people believe that success in life depends upon hard work and determination, while others believe that other factors like money and personal appearance are important. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

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Introduction
People think that
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strugle
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struggle
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life
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 teaches
lesson
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a lesson
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 for future
sucess
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success
. Some
belives
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believes
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 that a good amount of
money
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 and
personality
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also
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 play an important in role to
achive
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achieve
archive
 desire goals. I
disscussed
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discussed
 both views in the below paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
Some families have poor background due that they will
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strugle
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struggle
 lot to earn their daily
livelyhood
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livelihood
.
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 in slum areas, many
earns
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money
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 from garbage
colletion
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collection
 and in return
yhey
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they
 will get
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small
smaal
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a smaal
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 amount of
money
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 which is not enough for their food. To
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overcome
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over come
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overcome
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theses
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these
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 types of
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struggle
strugle
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 they do more work and get new
experince
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experience
experiences
. From past
lessons
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 they made
goood
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good
money
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 for their bright future.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,
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many
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may
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many
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 people are from
good
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the good
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 family background due that they will get good facilities like education, better living
strandars
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standards
. In India may business person child develop their father
bussiness
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business
 and become
succeful
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successful
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life
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. If we take
example
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the example
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 of models they
belongs
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belong
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 to
poor
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a poor
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 family even they
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strugle
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struggle
lot
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a lot
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 for
better
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a better
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life
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 but their
personality
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 makes
rich
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them rich
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.
Body paragraph 3
In my point of view
momey
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money
,
personality
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 and hard work
plays
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play
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 an important
roles
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role
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 in every
indiviual
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individual
life
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. From hard work teaches lessons
fro
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for
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 survival,
money
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 helps to get moral support and
personality
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 makes famous.
Conclusion
In conclusion, wealth,
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strugle
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struggle
 and charm will give
better
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a better
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life
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 to an
indiviual
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individual
.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perseverance
  • discipline
  • resilience
  • effort
  • tenacity
  • external factors
  • financial resources
  • favorable appearance
  • perceptions
  • advantages
  • intrinsic
  • extrinsic
  • sustainable
  • facilitating
  • undeniable
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