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Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today's world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

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It is true that in today's busy world
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 have no place to exist and it would be a good idea to have them completely shut down sooner than later. In fact,
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 are against animal welfares, which can impact their health and the ability to mate.
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 is the fact that animals have captured in a cage or a small area which is against their right of moving around.
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, human has somehow interfered with their life for their own selfish purpose and prevent them from freely moving around.
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, by feeding them with processed and premade food we have
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 banning them to normally quest for food which is part of their normal life.
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, we by removing them from their home, we have
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 interfered with the way they mate and offsprings putting them in danger of extinction. The question that rise is how can we learn about animals without having to capture them in
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. The answer is simple, nowadays with the advancement of technology we can put small cameras everywhere from the deep level of seas to as high as the top of the highest mountains. In
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 ,way we will be able to learn about them while they are living in their own environment. The other alternative would be to create virtual
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 and invite kids and animal lovers to places and create different educational rooms with experts explaining about each of them. Having
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 around cities have always been a problem and was always a subject for many debates.
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 of ,all it's against animal wellbeings and the right to separate them from their normal environment and by doing that we
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 prevent them from finding their mates and regenerate.
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