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In the world, the pollution level in large cities is being worse. What are the causes and solutions?

#world #pollution #level #cities
In
this
 modern era, most cities
are have
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 a large
number of
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population
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 compared to ever before we can see that.
Afair
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A fair
 amount of people think that the populace
level
 in big cities is being worse.
This
 is a true statement. Due to many reasons
such
 as Job opportunity and facilities.
In
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this
 essay discusses the main causes and I will give
solution
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 in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with,there are many reasons
to
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the
population
level
 are increasing. The primary reason is Job opportunity is more available in
only
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 metro rather than country,
therefore
 the village people have to move town
area
 in order to the community
level
 are dramatically increasing.
In addition
, the big companies are only run in
urban
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 place,
as a
result
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 the folks are must
lived
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 forcefully due to the work.
In other words
, the salary is
the
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another factors for city
population
 expanding because most folks would like to live a
sophestication
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sophistication
 lifestyle
such
 as good salary, reputation work, and etc.
Therefore
, the populace
level
 is being bad.
For example
,
accroding
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according
 to the
suvery
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survey
 said that 90% of the community would like to live in
a
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 urban
area
 rather than
rural
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a rural
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area
 in order to
they
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move into their home place.
Moreover
,
the
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another
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 main reason is
facility
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a facility
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in other words
tge
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the
 urban side only have more facilities rather than
rural
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a rural
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 side because the government is only focused
city
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 improvements due to more big companies are available and the cabinet official buildings and reputation University and Hospital and etc. These are the resources are available in
metro
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the metro
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area
,
therefore
 the residents can change their living place
such
 as these resources are given. To conclude,
this
 situation will be reduced irrefutably. The solution is
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, the ministry should focus
to
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 the countryside
this
 means they must do the improvements potential to the
under developed
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area
therefore
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, we might avoid the metro
population
.
Secondly
, the huge corporate industries should start their business in
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underdeveloped
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under developed
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 territory
as a result
,
this
 trend will reduce automatically.
Finally
, all potential
are
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 equally
distribute
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 to
the
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all folks
to
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around the world
in other words
 not only for developed territory but
also
 for village territory. I hope
this
 solution might diminish to the urban community
level
 in the future.
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