In the world, the pollution level in large cities is being worse. What are the causes and solutions?

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population
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compared to ever before we can see that.
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A fair
amount of people think that the populace
level
in big cities is being worse.
This
is a true statement. Due to many reasons
such
as Job opportunity and facilities.
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this
essay discusses the main causes and I will give
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in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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the
population
level
are increasing. The primary reason is Job opportunity is more available in
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metro rather than country,
therefore
the village people have to move town
area
in order to the community
level
are dramatically increasing.
In addition
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place,
as a
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the folks are must
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forcefully due to the work.
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, the salary is
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another factors for city
population
expanding because most folks would like to live a
sophestication
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sophistication
lifestyle
such
as good salary, reputation work, and etc.
Therefore
, the populace
level
is being bad.
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,
accroding
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according
to the
suvery
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survey
said that 90% of the community would like to live in
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urban
area
rather than
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area
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move into their home place.
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another
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main reason is
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in other words
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the
urban side only have more facilities rather than
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side because the government is only focused
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improvements due to more big companies are available and the cabinet official buildings and reputation University and Hospital and etc. These are the resources are available in
metro
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area
,
therefore
the residents can change their living place
such
as these resources are given. To conclude,
this
situation will be reduced irrefutably. The solution is
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, the ministry should focus
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the countryside
this
means they must do the improvements potential to the
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area
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, we might avoid the metro
population
.
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under developed
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territory
as a result
,
this
trend will reduce automatically.
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, all potential
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equally
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to
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all folks
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around the world
in other words
not only for developed territory but
also
for village territory. I hope
this
solution might diminish to the urban community
level
in the future.
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