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In many countries schools have severe problems with students behavior. What do you think are the cause of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#countries #schools #students #behavior
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It is true that nowadays in many parts of the
schools
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 are facing some
problems
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 associated with
students
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 behaviour. There are many attributes to
this
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 kind of
problems
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, but the most important is physical punishment in
schools
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 and solutions can be done by teaching school
discipline
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 among
students
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.
To begin
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 with,
phyiscal
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physical
punishments
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 for
students
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 in
schools
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 might be the
first
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 and the main causes of student's bad behaviour style. The reason for
this
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 is that there is a lot of negative effects of
phyiscal
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physical
punishments
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 leading to different types of antisocial performance
such
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 as bullying and stealing.
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, it adverse effects
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 other classmates and causes
different
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a different
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 kind of
problems
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 at
institution
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the institution
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.
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, in order to deal with these
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schools
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 should prohibit
pyhysical
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physical
punishments
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instead
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 teach
academy
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discipline
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. The main goal of teaching academy
discipline
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 at
schools
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 is to make them learn to behave in
positive
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a positive
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 manner with
there
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their
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 other fellow
students
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 to keep up with
decorum
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the decorum
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 of the institution. Another solution is that teachers should promote the positive nature of
self respect
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, care. In conclusion,
although
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 there are lots of
problems
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 in
school
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a school
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 associated with student behaviour I strongly believe that physical
punishments
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 are the main one among them and I think it can
be reduce
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 by teaching academy
discipline
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 to
students
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.
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