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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

#governments #progress #people #country
FURTHERANCE OF ECONOMIC GROWTH IS OFTEN CONSIDERED AS THE CRUX OF MOST GOVERNMENTS THESE DAYS.
HOWEVER
, SOME PEOPLE OPINE THAT THERE ARE OTHER ASPECTS, OF EQUAL IMPORTANCE, THAT A
NATION
 HAS TO CONSIDER OTHER THAN ECONOMIC ACCELERATION ALONE. IN
THIS
 ESSAY, I WILL DISCUSS BOTH VIEWPOINTS PRESENTED AND EXPLAIN WHY I SUPPORT THE LATTER'S VIEW. ON THE ONE HAND, ECONOMY IS EVERY
NATION
'S BLOODLINE.
THIS
 MEANS THAT THE ECONOMIC STATUS OF A
COUNTRY
 IS CORRELATED DIRECTLY TO ITS CITIZEN'S LIVING CONDITION. TO EXEMPLIFY, RESIDENTS OF DEVELOPED
NATION
 TENDS TO ENJOY A LIFESTYLE FAR SUPERIOR TO THOSE WHO LIVE IN UNDERDEVELOPED AND DEVELOPING COUNTRIES. HAVING SAID THAT, IT IS
THEREFORE
 SAFE TO HIGHLIGHT THE CRUCIALITY OF PUSHING A COUNTY'S ECONOMY TO A PROGRESSIVE TREND.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, TO UNDERSCORE THE ECONOMY AS THE ULTIMATE GOAL FOR AUTHORITIES TO ACHIEVE IS TO UNDERMINE OTHER SECTORS OF EQUAL IMPORTANCE.
FIRSTLY
, THE GENERAL HEALTH OF THE MASSES. WHEN A
COUNTRY
'S WORKFORCES ARE HEALTHY AND WELL, WORK PRODUCTIVITY IS ASSURED.
SECONDLY
, EDUCATION. WHEN A
COUNTRY
 HAS A LARGE NUMBER OF LITERATE AND EDUCATED CITIZENS WHO RUNS THE MECHANISM OF A
COUNTRY
, THE LIKELIHOOD OF ITS ECONOMIC PROGRESSION IS ALMOST CERTAIN AS THERE ARE MORE BRAINS THINKING INTRICATELY FOR THE FURTHERANCE OF ITS
NATION
. TO RECAPITULATE, IN MY OPINION, INDEED, OTHER THAN TRADE AND PRODUCTION, ESSENTIAL SECTORS
SUCH
 AS EDUCATION AND HEALTH SHOULD BE CONSIDERED IMPORTANT AS WELL OWING TO THE FACT THAT PEOPLE ARE THE MAIN MACHINERY OF A
COUNTRY
.
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