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The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The reconstruction of some
buildings
 in some major cities have resulted in a huge financial effort,
however
, some believe that these expenses would rather be used for the improvement of public roads and housing. I partially agree with
this
 statement because there are more essential projects that the
government
 should prioritize.
To begin
 with, there is
the
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 number of abandoned
buildings
 in some historical cities which are noticed these days. Most developed nations often build some infrastructure which later on, are being abandoned
as a result
 of unsuccessful ventures. To be practical, governments tend to finance and convert these old
buildings
 into tourist spots or museums. We can
also
 observe that some houses are renovated and turned into historical houses which can promote the culture and tradition of a specific place or city.
On the other hand
, some authorities believe that it is better to spend the
government
 budget for the construction of
buildings
 or houses. After all, many home deprived families are existing and their housing conditions are indeed awful.
This
 must be the top priority of higher authorities , especially for some poor countries. Another thing, if the
government
 will take more consideration on some public roads, it would give passengers less hassle from traffic, giving
such
 a smooth and fast journey for all. These will help to minimize air pollution and overcrowding especially in urban places, To conclude, I partially believe that it is necessary to give importance to renovations of some
buildings
 most especially if it would
result
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 inconvenience and increased economic status.
However
, there are a lot of existing problems
such
 as public roads and housing that the
government
 should give more desired effort as it is presently affecting our daily lives. Thereby, if resolving these matters
first
, will benefit all mankind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical significance
  • Urban charm
  • Tourism
  • Revitalizing the economy
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Environmental sustainability
  • New construction
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Cost-effective
  • Long-term benefits
  • Immediate needs
  • Living standards
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