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In some countries a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether to have an unequal income model for the
people
 of some countries involved with
this
 model or not. In
this
 essay, I am going to examine
this
 question from both points of view and
then
 explain my belief... There are
people
 who argue that the benefits of being able to earn more than six figures create an environment for those who have ambitions but not only for good of themselves, for good of
people
.
This
 notion is considerably outweighed its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
this
 is the comforts and the benefits that are provided by the
people
 who have possessed a contemporary lifestyle. It is
also
 possible to say that having the freedom of making more money than other individuals
also
 as seen as gaining status in society by most
people
. One good illustration of
this
 is the
people
 who are capable to invent great things in many different aspects of life but not doing it due to the feeling of not being rewarded or inadequately rewarded.
On the other hand
, others believe that inequality of income is responsible for almost every challenging and destructive consequences of life’s itself.
People
 often have
this
 opinion because they feel stressed out, tired even exhausted from almost everything that life brings to them. A
second
 point is that
people
 have lost the trust of their own
people
 and the inevitable competition in every phase of their lives feels like running a marathon for the whole of their lives. In
the
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 I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I feel that today’s systems, governments and the dynamics of the business world are starting to make life harder rather than supposedly making it easier with their complexity for all of us.
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Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income disparity
  • social tension
  • economic growth
  • government regulation
  • equitable distribution
  • brain drain
  • innovation
  • incentive
  • progressive taxation
  • income inequality
  • salary caps
  • market-driven
  • monopolies
  • exploitation
  • financial regulation
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